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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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0 posted 2004-08-05 01:29 AM


I went trying to fix my heart,
and rearrange my skin, in a way that would divert controversy.

We skipped around the open squares in the soil, that were morphing into grave beds.
Why label a limit, or a moment forsaken,
when just to exist by you is transending me to a place yellow and overly sweet.

My veins are strung like spider webs, and cut each others flow.
Blue and red, directions are varied.
My blood drains from my face into your hands,
you have my warmth.
I left my heart on the floor of your car,
can we arrange a time for me to pick it up?

I'm brought to my knees, to bruise myself in over-extertion.
An attempt to please, the unattainable.
I've been bathing in dirty water, reliving the times in mid-week confidence struggles.
Because my brain aches from the pressure of their righteous and condemning eyes.
They reach their hands up and around,
to where my theories are forming.
Poking and proding, insertion of doubt.
My feelings are slow to receive and react.

All my blood is draining,
all my teeth are shaken loose,
from just the mere thought of you.
Your hands are spread open, as I trickle through.
I'm sure I saw you laughing, sure I saw your head thrown back in ultimate histeria.


[This message has been edited by Lexy (08-05-2004 08:05 PM).]

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dodge_chick2003
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since 2004-01-18
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1 posted 2004-08-06 01:08 AM


This wa an awesome poem but at times I was lost. Keep up the good work.
HeroicVillan
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since 2002-11-09
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Lost.....
2 posted 2004-08-06 01:13 AM


Beautiful, though im not just saying that, though, sometimes, feelings that strong are sometimes better ignored.
      - Jim

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2004-08-06 02:58 PM


ignored. ignoring, has always made things worse for me.

and its ok if you were lost.
I have always sort of felt, that is what makes writing good. If the explaination is not blatant, and you have to search for it. twist things, in order for them to make sense in your head.

To be misunderstood,is to be great

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