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TheGirlNoOneKnew
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since 2003-12-04
Posts 92
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0 posted 2004-07-31 08:31 PM


Your voice makes me want to vomit
to regurgitate and spit back
all the lies that you have told me.
And I'd laugh as you'd hold my hair,
pulling back the loose strands
as you stab that knife in my back.
My blood staining your hands,
my tears falling on your jeans
as you turn away from me.
Collapsing to the cold floor,
I fight to live in innocence again
in a world without you in it.
For you're a conniver,
a snake, a rodent so vile
even I can't stand to look at you.
And as my head lifts up in surrender
I can't help but whisper aloud
"So much for best friends."


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Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19
Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket
1 posted 2004-07-31 10:09 PM


God..All your poems are so amazing..This one too left me in awe..I find myself looking for your poems on the forums..Keep it up.
<3
Persephone

The plaster dented from you fist..In the hall where you had your first kiss..Reminds you that the memorys wont fade

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
2 posted 2004-07-31 10:39 PM


Wow. This is the one of the best poem's I've read in a long time. The descriptions are amazing, and I can feel all the emotions you put into it.
The last 3 lines are a perfect ending.
Thanks for sharing. This is going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
3 posted 2004-08-02 06:49 PM


omg...wow...this poem just left me speechless.

I am going to add it to my library, hope that you don't mind.


~Alli~

I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry.

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