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thinktwice
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0 posted 2004-07-27 03:50 AM




The shallow means
in the endless deep
Close in on me
They follow me

The defiant creeds
Only half asleep
They baffle me
They puzzle me

The moment's need
On my insides it feeds
It troubles me
Oh how it trouble me

The mirror's teeth
In        they scream
They're watching me
They're watching me

© Copyright 2004 Adam Wolf - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-27 07:30 AM


I liked this one. Pretty simply put, but very nicely said.

You did well with this poem. Keep posting

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

thinktwice
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2 posted 2004-07-28 11:10 PM


why in the name of all the is sacred and holy did the word %        " get edited out of my poem???????????
kissa~rachelle
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3 posted 2004-07-30 01:05 AM


I dunno, cuz i dont know what the word is, seeing how they edited it out....They do that to me sumtimes too. Very nice write. Like ^^^ said b4. Simple, but nicely written.

Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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4 posted 2004-12-26 03:58 PM


I like this Adam....KEEP POSTING!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Lexy
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5 posted 2005-01-12 10:29 PM


WOAH...
I love that...

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