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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2004-07-24 03:28 PM


Its only a matter of time,
before the matters in my mind,
clearly present themselves.
I wonder if anything about my bitter yellow facade, tastes sweet anymore?
My bones are aging quicker then my skin,
its a race for the golden prize of death and contentment.
Buckles on my knees grow tighter with each swelling hour.
I'm so uninspired by the flouresant, rundown, tearing vinyl, foggy headlight
type of life.

to be continued...

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-26-2004 12:03 AM).]

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since 2000-08-30
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
1 posted 2004-07-25 11:19 PM


The poem was alright.

it's very incomplete though- the ending just STOPPED ...like woah- what happened?

but it definitely showed to be a great piece in the making..... if you could explain some of your metaphores- id like that too

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

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