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A.L
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0 posted 2004-07-08 11:23 PM



Broken Again...

I knew this feeling all too well,
A re-occuring nightmare each time I fell,
I promised myself I'd never hurt, I'd never fall again,
Ignored that feeling deep inside, to never let this begin,

Counting every minute passing,
Leads us to this place,
Watching all the hours fading,
Empty look upon my face,

Why did I let you in my heart,
Why did I let you break it,
Why do I feel so all alone,
I breathe each breath, you take it,

Clenching my eyes to hold tears in,
You gave me a reason to try,
I let you see me, I let this begin
Why did you give me a reason to cry?

My heart in my throat once again,
I can't find the strength to swallow,
Another tear falls down to remind me  
of why I feel so hollow,

A hole in this place,
An empty sigh,
A feeling with no words,
No will left to cry,

Broken again,
Can you hear it in my voice,
Falling alone,
It's not like I had a choice,

I wanted to have a reason,
I wanted to fall into place,
A wish to turn back time,
All marks to be erased,

A memory locks those moments,
We all choose to forget,
A feeling so strong towards those,
You wish you never met,

A hurt so real you think your dreaming,
A pinch, But I'm awake,
Emptiness you've felt a thousand times,
Caused again by the same mistake,

I promise myself I'll never hurt,
I'll never fall again,
A fake smile and a lie to myself,
If only I could pretend...

© Copyright 2004 Alison - All Rights Reserved
Hallucination
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1 posted 2004-07-10 11:52 AM


very emotional write!!! I really felt it.
thanks for sharing...

Brian,-

WinterWren
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...Coming to
2 posted 2004-07-11 09:22 PM


Wow. This is such an amazing poem. It really hit home hard.
Im really speachless as to what else to say,
beautiful piece of art. I especially love this stanza...
A memory locks those moments,
We all choose to forget,
A feeling so strong towards those,
You wish you never met,

Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
3 posted 2004-07-26 01:49 PM


A hole in this place,
An empty sigh,
A feeling with no words,
No will left to cry,

Loved those lines.
~Broken~

"Base not your joy upon the deeds of others, for what is given can be taken away."

Peter Steele

[This message has been edited by Broken (07-26-2004 11:46 PM).]

Dopey Dope
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4 posted 2004-07-26 03:15 PM


This was really good.

Many of us have felt the same way. I know i have.

You've captured your pain and I hope that everything gets better soon

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
5 posted 2004-07-26 07:10 PM


Broken again,
Can you hear it in my voice,
Falling alone,
It's not like I had a choice.
~
Emptiness you've felt a thousand times,
Caused again by the same mistake.
~

I loved those two parts. This was very awesome. WELL DONE. I know so many people can relate to this, heartbreak is part of life, we all go through it, that's the sucky part of love though. Very well done, diffently a great piece.

"I tried so hard...But in the end...It doesn't even matter...."~Linkin Park

kissa~rachelle
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6 posted 2004-08-30 10:07 PM


Oh wow...I cant beleive i missed this one before.

This was an amazing poem, i really love it. I can really relate right now. I "fell" for this guy, and he broke my heart, and so i told myself "never again"...and well you know the rest...

I just thought i would reply, and bump this back to the top....

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

*Alli4000*
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7 posted 2004-08-31 07:15 PM


Thanks Karissa for bumping this back...I, too, can't believe I missed it!

This was such an emotional write, and I understand what your going through.  I'm gonna put this in my library, hope that you don't mind!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

peachesNcream
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8 posted 2004-09-01 09:58 PM


Heartbreak, everyone knows it but not so many can put it into words as well as you have! I'm very impressed with this piece. Great work! ~Jess

PS- I'm going to add this one to the collection in my library!

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

Star T
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9 posted 2004-09-03 12:46 PM


i just got into a relationship recently and we'r falling in love so fast.i kinda got scARED after reading this cos i was previously VERY hurt and broken and just am healing and i truly hope this time will be different.TIME WILL TELL RIGHT?

Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved.

I_dont_know_me
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UK, Cymru
10 posted 2004-09-03 04:47 PM


I promise myself I'll never hurt,
I'll never fall again,
A fake smile and a lie to myself,
If only I could pretend...

wow this poem on a whole was awesome but this did ti for me great way 2 close this poem... i promised a million times but its a funni thing u alwasy get dragged back thanks for an excellent read ~Emma~

A.L
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since 2003-03-15
Posts 131

11 posted 2004-09-08 12:33 PM


thanks for reading and I'm glad you can relate...well not really glad because feeling like this sucks! Sometimes I feel like I'm the only one going through this and it kinda cheers me up that I'm only human and people go through this everyday, I'm just happy I can write about it...

I see me frowning in your eyes...
I see the fear in you...
Where no one ever should be...

::From Autumn To Ashes::

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