I just cant Understand..How anyone can go on breathing when true love ends...

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Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-07-07 02:40 PM

To Lose a loved one

To death

Is to lose a life

When that person dies

As does a part of yourself

You don't become mindless

No,

Your head is filled with

So many thoughts

Of What If

You can Barely Focus at all

You don't become lifeless

No,

You still have a life

But you can barely function

You are dead to the world

And there is so much pain

Flowing through your body

Because your heart has been broken to pieces

That you can't even walk straight

You always feel like you need

To throw up

To scrath the itch burning

In your chest

That's the misery

Consuming you from the inside out

There is a bottomless pit

In your stomach
Makes it hard to breathe

Your body is weak
From the destruction of mind
You shake and don't move a single muscle
All at once
Time Stops
Reality unravels
The world fades away
It hurts to open your eyes, to speak, to feel, to live
And you Pray
With all your heart
That you soon, too will die
But it is like
Life clings on to you
And the same 3 drops of blood
Are circulating in your veins
So you are icy
But still warm with life
There is no greater death
Then that of what you live for
It does not matter if
Body is alive
If all meaning has been
Wiped away
Grasp of nerve slips
right through your clenched fist
When a person you are in love with
Dies
So do you
But you are left as a martyr
On this earth
And live with the same hell
Everytime you wake up
So you beg God
For no more mornings
Yet they always come.

I hope your sleeping good at nights....
Knowing I never sleep at all

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-07-07 05:34 PM

And the same 3 drops of blood
Are circulating in your veins

...I was drawn in by the way you write.
It is simple, yet so captivating.
I do not first hand know this feeling.
But you brought me a greater understanding of how it must be.
hang in there.
excellent writing

Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

2 posted 2004-07-08 12:38 PM

Thank you
<3

I hope your sleeping good at nights....
Knowing I never sleep at all

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2004-07-25 05:44 AM

hey
im really sorry this is a sad piece, but it is well written and i like it. thanks for sharing.
bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

4 posted 2004-07-25 05:26 PM

I didn't even realize this until I read your comments...I was drawn to your poem by the way you write, like the first comment stated. This poem is really good. Awesome work! ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2004-07-25 06:39 PM

Wow this was pretty damn powerful.

I thought you wrote it nicely. Good flow!
You really captured true pain in this one.

As for some advice: time doth heal.

But- it never lets you forget.
You will be ok

Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end.

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