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I hate you soo much!!
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I hate you soo much!! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
HEy, this poem is just full of anger ,,,if u wanna read it read it ,if not well i cant control you,,i wrote it to someone that have raised me and now still is ,,but still cant seem to know the point of me!! well please be honest ,,thats all i can ask for!!!By the way i wrote this poem a very long time ,,its not my best but i just wanted to share it with you ... !!!!!! -------------------------------------- I hate you for being the way you are, You never supported me in anything i do, I hate you for BEINGa person without knowing whats wrong with me! I hate you for never caring , I hate you for never asking " are you okay?" I hate you for never being a true person, I hate with all my heart, YOu never held my hand ,telling me you love me, You never told me anything about loving me, I hate you for never letting me enjoy my life as being a young girl, I hate you for never listening to me when my problems are falling down my head like rain falling down the sky, I hate you for never kissing me or atleast pretending to hug me when i needed someone to hold, Why IS it when i ask you i need some love you say, grow up ?? Why is it when i ask you i need you to hold me when im ill ,you always get away?,. Are'nt imade from the same blood? I cant deny you for life, Its time to speak my heart, Im now old ,turning another step , are you going to take that away too?, Im now alone ,i lived all my life alone ,so i think i will make it without you!! ALL i can tell you is may god bless you,,and may god give you another chance in life!!! Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
ok...let's see.....this poem is so full of emotion. I'm so sorry that this person did these things to you.  Other than that, I have some things you could improve upon in this poem. You usually have some spelling and grammer errors. For example you forget to leave spaces between words, etc. When you do this, it really takes away from the poem because sometimes, depending on the error, it takes me a few seconds to understand what you were trying to say. Overall, nice job...keep it up! ~Alli~ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
lol,,,sis yea i agree ,,i ju7st dont take so much time on grammer like i take time on express what im trying to say,,,thank you soo much for always correcting me...well gtg ..lol....take care and thanks again Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!! |
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