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Teen Poetry #7

a song for you

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

0 posted 2005-10-03 10:37 PM

I want you;
I need you;
I miss you;
I love you;

I want to feel your kiss.
I need to hear your voice.
I miss your arms around me.
I love you every day of the week.

I want you;
I need you;
I miss you;
I love you;

I want you to need me.
I need you to miss me.
I miss you loving me.
I love you wanting me.

I want you;
I need you;
I miss you;
I love you;

yeah its repetative cause its a song... kinda... wow... tell me what you think good or bad.

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

1 posted 2005-10-09 05:03 PM

i liked the next to last grouping,
"
I want you to need me.
I need you to miss me.
I miss you loving me.
I love you wanting me."

i thought it was cool how you used the last word to roll into the next line. Cool read thanks

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light"
-Dylan Thomas

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