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Teen Poetry #7

Love is like a cancer!!!

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

0 posted 2004-06-30 04:01 PM

Look into my eyes,
LOOK!!

What is it you love?,
WHat is it you need?
what is it that makes you never wanna leave?

I have discovered that i have no future,
I Have no  life on this face of earth,

I have a cancer that will never leave my heart,
Its called a cancer of love.,

I cant just move on,I just cant!!!
LOOK AGAIN!!

I have loved ,I hAVE left my dreams ,so lets move on,

And lets leave our story to where ever fate takes !!!!
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its not one of my best,i just wrote it in 10 minutes ,,,enjoy!!!!!!!!!!

Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!!

[This message has been edited by sweet_cute_palestinian04 (06-30-2004 06:40 PM).]

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

1 posted 2004-06-30 06:13 PM

This is one of my favorites by you. I just like the way it settled in my head. Great Job!!!

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-06-30 08:11 PM

loved it very much...

~Alli~

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2004-07-01 03:03 AM

hey,
i really liked the first part of this poem. the part that is like basically asking someone why they love me (at least it seems like that to me) i used to ask my ex-boyfriend the same question...i like how you handled it in your piece. i also liked the length of this piece.

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2004-07-25 10:27 PM

This poem was interesting..

Love is like a cancer? That's an odd comparison, but for what its worth- it sorta worked for you. Maybe a little bit more thought into this one?

If love spreads like a cancer- then it kills. But if love spreads like the ocean, then it is infinite. Circular- and purposeful...

regardless of which- thank you for the read

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

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