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Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
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0 posted 2004-06-29 07:40 PM



I am scared of you and don’t know why.
Sometimes I just want to cry.
I have been thrown down and beaten around,
It’s not your fault, and it’s not mine.
I have just got the wrong rhyme.
I know why I’m like this.
I can’t believe you want this,
I have failed your test.
And it’s leaving me in a mess.

This is just a little something I worked up, not my best just want to know what you think.
Thanks

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sweet_cute_palestinian04
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Posts 418
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1 posted 2004-06-30 01:05 PM


its soo intersting loved it,,keep writting
love and respect

Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!!

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-06-30 08:08 PM


Although this is not your best work, I still enjoyed it very much.  Great Job...keep it up!!!

~Alli~

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
3 posted 2004-07-01 03:11 AM


hey yeah i don't think this is your best, but then again i haven't read much by you.  i did really like a few lines from here, like the one about crying and the one that questions why someone would want that. those were cool, really relateable. thanks for sharing.

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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