Im sorry for the night i let you go!!

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Teen Poetry #7

Im sorry for the night i let you go!!

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

0 posted 2004-06-25 11:20 PM

Im sorry for the days and nights i let you go,
even though i never tried to do so,

I cried all night that my tears could fill an ocean, just to see you smile and say i love you so,

I walked over mountain overas  seeing your name up the sky ,screaming for help,but what can i do?

People thought i was crazy ,That i loved you so ,
People  thought i was an idiot ,but i still love you more than i ever have done so,

I got faith,
I got love,
I got trust,
BUT more importantly  I got you,!

But time went so fast that hours grew into days  and days grew into weeks and  a month seemed as a century ,
          SO LET me tell you now before its time for me to close the page ,that i will always love you SO.....

.  You will always be deep down the road of my heart that is full of real blood that will  never lET YOU FEEL  SO COLD,

Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!!

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-06-30 08:03 PM

I really like this poem because of all your emotion and because of the way you described everything. For example,

"I cried all night that my tears could fill an ocean"

Anyway, great job...keep it up!

~Alli~

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2004-07-01 03:14 AM

hey
i agree that the ocean line was cool, but i mean it's weird once again cause this just happened to me too kinda. so i get how ya feel, and i think you did a decent job of describing it. thanks for sharin

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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