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fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2004-06-25 04:03 AM



give me my negativity back
i wanna be empty again
what the hell is wrong with me?
all i can think of is you.
i was infamous
bergundy...
'the girl who didn't care'
now i'm more dramatic and emotional
than Oprah
which is mildly amusing
because i thought you were 'the one'
but you had a chance to run
and you took it
i thought that love meant more
but i guess that was stupid
i may not be perfect
but i'm damn good at being naive
so all i have to say is...
thanks
for those two wasted years
that i'll never get back


okay meh i am uber tired n whatnot so i'm gonna leave this one. i just wanted my 500th post to be a poem haha, i do like the end though...

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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with you
1 posted 2004-06-25 09:19 AM


well congrats on the 500th post....
this is a very strong and emotional post....one I am sure many will relate to.

blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05
Posts 183
an akward state of mind
2 posted 2004-06-27 06:10 PM


most definatly some strong feelings people can relate to.. i like it

"love is but a song we sing and fear's the way we die"

Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31
Posts 189
NM, USA
3 posted 2004-06-27 11:33 PM


I don't know why but I REALLY like this . . . Maybe it's b/c I been there before. Anyways, I'm going to add this to my library!

* For all the words of tongue and pen, the saddest are those, "It might have been." *

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
4 posted 2004-06-28 12:29 PM


wow awesomee,,,,i totally can relate to that alott,,,,keep it up,,
love and respect

peace

Fate is what controls the world so just let it go and I PROMISE YOU WILL MAKE IT!!!

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
5 posted 2004-06-28 01:50 PM


Great poem. I really love this one alot. Especially the line, "I may not be perfect, but Im damn good at being naive."
Again, excellent. Thanks for sharing, this one's going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
6 posted 2004-06-28 05:05 PM


hey everyone,
wow...thanks for replying. it never ceases to amaze me how weird poetry can be.  i wrote this one when i was uber tired and i was like 'meh, whatever. i'll post it anyway' and i'm glad i did because it seems like people actually like it lol.  thanks for replying again, be happy.
-bergundy-

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2004-07-27 11:34 AM


This was nice. I think you coul dhave worked on this one better, but you being tired is no excuse! lol!

just kidding.

you should definitely see if there's anything you can do with this poem, cuz it looks like a really great one. Potential is written all over it.

keep posting!

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
8 posted 2004-07-28 11:47 AM


I agree with Dopey...~lol~

Potential is definetly in the air...
Congrats on the 500th post...


Kissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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