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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2004-06-23 11:26 PM


Well guys, this is out of my normal style.I just wrote how I felt and then made it into a poem, I don't really even know much about this style of poem. Please help me become better, no matter how awful this one is. It's mixed prolly cause I'm so upset. I miss my bf like crazy and it hurts right now so it might not make total sense to you all, sorry.


I’m thrown in a spiral
oflonging and lust
For what I had before.
Something I had
that I didn’t acknowlege;
didn’t realize was there.

I miss him with a passion
Leaving me so helpless.
I miss his promises
The unexplainable love he gave,

I long for the undesirable;
I long for the tears I cried for him
That weren’t filled with pain.
I miss his comfort,
The pillow in my night.

I long for his understanding.
Among millions of people,
The only one,
The single one who posses this power,
Of understanding my
thoughts,
Desires,
Loves,
And pains.

I’m in a lost vortex of love and pain,
Something that contradicts the other.
Though love contains pain
It’s full of joy when used right.

Now I’m in the middle,
Trying to find a way out.
I miss your everything.
Suppressed by your love,
yet striving to get out
To take away this longing.
I’m trapped in your love.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
1 posted 2004-06-25 03:37 AM


bloody hell! this is cool, exactly how i'm feeling right now.  why do you want our help to make the emotion poems better? my philosphy is just post it...even if everyone hates it, all that matters is YOU like it. good luck with your situation, dont try to change your poetry for other people. be happy
bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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