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Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-06-13 02:05 PM


Pull That Lever

Subtle racial slurs
over the top antics
inhaling smog and cigarette smoke
pushing aside the fresh air
waiting for a light to be shown
just leave us alone
the youth of the nation
fleeing from festering sess pools
of gratuitous violence and tommy hilfiger
TV-MA. Made for us by us
Living in the prime time lime light
born for the day
living and dieing for a Saturday night
with siran wrap lawns
and tin foil trees
living in a styrofoam existence
speaking flames
acting in typhoons
with disney attitudes
living near the pearl William Gates
but never reaching
looking for a late night savior
only finding a one night flavor
there's only one man
who can take us out of this akward situation
only one man
who can satisfy the youth of the nation
so go on ahead conan
and pull that lever


well everyone it's been a while since i've posted on here so forgive me if i'm a little rusty. Oh and for those who don't know the pull that lever thing refers to conan o'brian's walker texas ranger clip lever that her pulls now. anyway i hope you enjoy it. Please tell me truthfully what you think.

nice use of muffin

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Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
1 posted 2004-06-14 01:52 AM


I think it read just like a song. I like this one. The only part that jumped out at me was the whole styrofoam world scene. For me, it took me out of the mood that had been set and reminded me of some elementary school project. I understand the poitn you were trying to get across but it didn't do it for me. Thats just MHO though. Thanks for the read.
blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05
Posts 183
an akward state of mind
2 posted 2004-06-20 02:01 PM


Wow I really like this a lot ... i don't really know what to say about it, but it's different... and it's good
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