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Greeneyes7
Junior Member

since 2001-11-05

Posts 16
Illinois

0 posted 2004-06-06 03:04 AM

Agree to disagree
and let it be
insults flying around
angry voices sound
What resolutions will come
assuming there are some

I'm not willing to fight
until I lose all sight
of the reason I fell for you
and the reason that you fell too

Agree to disagree
please let it be
I love you too much to fight
Let's stop fighting for tonight.

Life is what you make it. Live each day as if it was your last.

sweet_cute_palestinian04
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

1 posted 2004-06-06 05:37 PM

this is amazing,,,,keep up the amazing work,,i havent seen around in awhile lol,,well take care

peace

I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!!
Admit that im right,,!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-06-06 11:04 PM

I like this alot, especially the end.
Good poem, short but sweet.
Thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2004-06-07 02:05 AM

for a short, simple poem, that was really strong. I could really feel how you felt and invision what you saw. I hope this is working out for you. good work.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

Rommance_Touch
Member

since 2004-05-07

Posts 97

4 posted 2004-06-07 07:41 AM

its so wonderfull one...it gives the figure a clear love and how much u suffer but yr still hold this love...i like it so much

wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

5 posted 2004-06-08 04:05 PM

firstly, i'm not always against rhymes, but here they really did stick out. i must assume that you were trying to tell us more in the silences than in the words you were telling us? i just felt the couplets really brought a monotony to the whole piece, a let-down. to some degree this rather suits the theme of the piece though, that of weariness at fighting.

more imagery, less telling would have been nice. but as far as a short poem goes, this was good...

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2004-06-11 10:50 PM

This poem was pretty good, short and to the point. I really liked the title. It worked very well witht the poem. Thanks for the read.
Jen

Everything gets better in the end, and if it's not better, it's probably not the end.

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

7 posted 2004-06-14 01:54 AM

This one hit close to home. Very good (and thought provoking) write, thank you for sharing.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2004-07-05 01:36 AM

**short but sweet**

~Alli~

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

9 posted 2004-07-07 03:27 AM

Hmm...I'm not sure what to say. It was very good, but seemed as if something was missing. I don't know though, that's just what i got out of it. I'm pretty sure I remember you from awhile back, and your work as always top-notch. I'm not talking down about it, I just don't know. ha anyway, keep writing

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

10 posted 2004-07-11 09:26 PM

very boring, the rhyme was terribly...forced.
so standard...think outside the box next time.

zenny
Member

since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

11 posted 2004-07-13 06:10 AM

This poem was really extraordinary!
It flowed; it PULLED me to the end; and i think everyone can agree with the contents.
Why fight if u know u love each other, then again fights are needed sometimes too

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