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Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
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0 posted 2004-06-01 12:02 PM






The Lover's Tears

The lover's tears are endless of tears, are may hurt
are may wound, but are glisten in the sky like a stars
you'll never see them, but you will feel
are a tears of silence, are not ended,
but are hurting more than the clear tears fall on the face
the heart is stop walking, just walking where? nowhere, it doesnt know
may another place of tears of big silence and more inside tears
the lover's tears are wounded and hurted
but become more sweet when i had back to my hurter
one word she said, SORRY, made me life and alive
no words no tears, just a sielnce of death
are the the tears you will never see
but you will feel

I LOVE YOU with my tears inside






[This message has been edited by Rommance_Touch (06-02-2004 08:33 PM).]

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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
1 posted 2004-06-01 02:46 PM


the grammar mistakes made this close to unreadable. you need to go back and edit it so i can actually understand what you are saying.
Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
2 posted 2004-06-02 02:20 AM


Yes I agree, it was very hard for me to read as well. Im sure it would be a great poem if you fixed the errors...
Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97

3 posted 2004-06-02 08:35 PM


IM so pleasure there are a good PPl inform me and not just left without a comment, soooo thx

i hope now be readable

thx again

~~~LOVERS OF POEMS~~~~


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