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Teen Poetry #7

I'll wait.

Fleur
Member

since 2004-04-09

Posts 103

0 posted 2004-05-28 11:27 AM

- It's just something I wrote, very ´quick. It's not that good. But still, if you like it then please comment

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Look into my eyes;
what do you see?
a broken heart,
and an empty mind?

That was before I met you,
you've filled my heart with your love,
and giving me somthing special to think about,
you're love is driving me nuts.

I haven't felt like this before,
it's all new and feels very secure,
in your arms; I feel my heart jumping,
beside you; I feel like dying.

Your kisses make me insane,
I want you, but can't, I feel a pain,
I'll wait for the day you make me yours,
I'll wait for you, my love,

yankees01rugby
Junior Member

since 2003-08-13

Posts 48
USA

1 posted 2004-05-28 12:21 PM

i like it! only if i could find someone like that for me.

"What your mind believes, your body will achieve. Its time to start believing."

Rommance_Touch
Member

since 2004-05-07

Posts 97

2 posted 2004-05-29 01:43 PM

You have a meaning but hope to express it in more touched feelings

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2004-05-30 09:31 PM

This poem has a kind of "mixed-up-ness" of someone who is writing in love. That in itself makes it beautiful...
~Live and Laugh~

The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow
~Bella~

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

4 posted 2004-05-31 12:57 PM

Belabeautiful put it perfectly... The mixed-upedness is what makes this good... Something simple and quickly written, but the feelings are there.

Nicely done.

zenny
Member

since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

5 posted 2004-05-31 01:22 PM

beautifully expressed

Fleur
Member

since 2004-04-09

Posts 103

6 posted 2004-06-01 06:05 AM

Thank you all so much. I'm glad that you all liked it. -And it's true that it's written by a person who's in love

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