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tapper798
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My own world

0 posted 2004-05-20 09:15 PM


I'm not perfect,
this I already know,
I have nothing to prove,
I have nothing to show.

My eyes arn't brilliant blue,
or even a honey brown,
a mere hazel blue,
unique in thier own way I've found.

Niether is my hair blonde,
like the all American girl.
Mine's a mix of many colors,
colors of red and brown in a whirl.

I don't have a perfect figure,
I'm not very thin,
My body's full of curves
I'm not perfect, once again.

I'm not the girl,
of which guys usually dream,
I'm the girl who jokes and laughs,
I'm thier best friend it seems.

You can't pick apart my flaws,
and take parts of me away,
I am who I am right now,
and all of me's going to stay.

-Erin

This is about how I know I'm not perfect.I am not beautiful(Well to my bf i am but that's differnt) and I'm not a guys perfect girl but I am happy with who I am, this is just saying that and that people around me can't change me.I know it's not that great but let me know what you think anyways!

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
tapper798
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My own world
1 posted 2004-05-20 09:16 PM


O and if you haven't read my other one, My Angel, plz read that one, it's one of my favorites that I've written. lol *blush* and plz let me know what you think, it's always nice to hear other's opinions!

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
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2 posted 2004-05-20 09:38 PM


Hey, sis,,,,,as u founf a someone love u,,,as how u look like,,,whatever yr look like u got the beauty,,,,dont wait a one else opinion 4 how u look like,,,,u had a lover and thats good

and u have to be trusted yrself

~~~Romance_Touch~~~
   ~~Not_Ended~~

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3 posted 2004-05-20 09:49 PM


but you are beautiful, and this poem tells of your heart...it is refreshing to see this...and that you are great with yourself at your age should be encouragement to others....

~~**~~
le vent chante avec le calme doux
calme de nuit
sien beauté sur mes lèvres
~~**~~

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
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4 posted 2004-05-20 11:59 PM


this poem was veryy touching ,i really enjoyed reading it because its true about life ,,,people just judge the beauty of outside but they  never judge the inside...
keep up the great work and be ur best NOT for people but for hat u r now..love and respect peace

I will cover you with my blood,not only because
i love you but because your are the one that turned my blood a color....

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
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5 posted 2004-05-21 12:49 PM


Very good! I can really relate to it. I feel like when I read this that I'm actually talking...its kinda strange to say that but thats the way it came across to me...Awesome Poem!!!
*Thumbs Up!*

Censored
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6 posted 2004-05-21 03:17 PM


I'm sure you're beautiful... Nice Poem
tapper798
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My own world
7 posted 2004-05-21 10:49 PM


Thank you guys so much, I'm glad you like it and as some of you have said, yes I will admit I am very lucky to have a bf who think's i'm beautiful inside and out.  Thanks again!

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

*Alli4000*
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8 posted 2004-05-22 03:18 PM


WOW!!!!! I feel exactly like this. The emotions were real and the poem sounded like it really came from your heart. GREAT JOB!!!

~Alli~

aussie teen
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Australia
9 posted 2004-05-24 06:41 AM


i think this is a beautiful poem and i know how you feel......
keep up the writing
hope to see more of your work soon.
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????
i am who i am. no one can change that but me, even then it will be a fight to the death

Fleur
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Posts 103

10 posted 2004-05-24 09:33 AM


I know exactly how you feel. Right now, I feel the same. It's a beautiful poem! I loved it!
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