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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-05-20 06:58 AM



Look at what you put me through,
You don’t deserve to be forgiven!
WHY?!!?
MY GOD! I have none!
YOUR GREED! It owns you!
MY HATE – FOR YOU!
How can you just stand there,
And let him rip me to pieces,
With just his words….

Once I swore I wouldn’t….
Let him or you,
Bring me down..
But once again…It happened.
It hurt me more,
To watch you…
SAY NOTHING!

It hurt…
WHY?!?!?
Why…must you do this?!
I’m supposed to be your daughter...
But I guess that doesn’t matter…
To you…

You’ve scarred me so deep…
I will never be the same…
HOW COULD YOU!?!
Let him rule you!
He is NOT my father!
How DARE you!
Let him speak to me…
As though I’m nothing!
Why?! Mother…..Why?....

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

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Riley
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in the pouring rain
1 posted 2004-05-20 07:33 AM


wow...

thats a really good word to describe this...its full of so much anger...you could just feel it as you read....

on a further note....i know what your talking about....

always,
riley

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

Rommance_Touch
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2 posted 2004-05-20 01:36 PM


Hey, hey, a so bombed of anger poem....but dont make your ange forget the respect....


~~Romance_Touch~~
  ~Not_Ended~

Stepharoo
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3 posted 2004-05-20 08:24 PM


Wow, very powerful!
Keep it up.

peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears
4 posted 2004-05-20 08:57 PM


Good job, this was a great poem. I have a question though about the last line...did you intend to be angry or a sort of crying/sad emotion? If so or if not, that's what I got and it was awesome. Good work! ~Jess

"Hopeless romantics are only hopeless in the eyes of those who don't believe in romance." -Unknown

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In Your Poetic Mind
5 posted 2004-05-20 09:51 PM


keep the door open, and your heart and hurt will heal.....expressed so well...sorry that you are going through this.....

~~**~~
le vent chante avec le calme doux
calme de nuit
sien beauté sur mes lèvres
~~**~~

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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Earth
6 posted 2004-05-20 11:54 PM


i enjoyed reading this poem but it was kinda sooooo full of anger and hate,,,maybe sis she wants the best for you,,,i know u probably i cant stand that but sis we all go through the same,, just fight the problems ur face, face them as you love them believe me sis ,,there is nothing better than your mom in life  ,you will someday thank her for what she's doing to you now rememeber no matter what she does she is alwayz going to be the one to love u the most.,,,

take care of your self
love and respect
peace

I will cover you with my blood,not only because
i love you but because your are the one that turned my blood a color....

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
7 posted 2004-05-23 07:21 PM


Not everyone has your kind of optimism, and please don't act like you "know what I'm going through". Because in actuality, you know nothing, except what I write. I will never "thank her for what she is doing to me". But...everyone is allowed to have their opinions. Thanks everyone for the comments.

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

Ender
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8 posted 2004-05-24 01:38 AM


ammen spine grinder.....

keep up the good poetry, and please keep it coming

When you were born, everyone around you was smiling and you were crying. Live your life so that when you die, you're smiling and everyone around you i

zenny
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Belgium
9 posted 2004-05-31 01:23 PM


WOW!  This just gave me shivers!  Beautifully expressed your anger

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10 posted 2004-06-01 01:04 AM


Arn't mothers wonderfull? I happen to have a..ummm...lets call her less than wonderful mother as well so I'm sorry for your pain. But I am glad that you have your poetry as a mode of venting of that frusteration and anger. Nicely written, very emotional.
~Live and Laugh~

The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow
~Bella~

TigerZ
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11 posted 2004-06-03 08:38 PM


Very strong.  Very vivid.  Very angry.  Expresses what you are feeling so perfectly that i could feel your anger, the betrayal, the pain.  Very well done and best of luck.

A life without love…is no life at all.

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
12 posted 2004-06-07 04:01 PM


Thanks again everyone. Glad you liked this.

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

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