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lilibeelee
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since 2001-07-12
Posts 143


0 posted 2004-05-19 01:34 AM



I'm not sure that you know
How much pain you have caused
All these tears I have cryed
And this sorrow that I bare

I can't go on
Not anymore
I can't pretend that it's all fine
There isn't anything left it's gone

I can't bare to suffer
I can't seem to breathe
I need rest
I am so weak

You take and take
But you never give
I wish I had another life to live

I seek for guidance
I recive no anwser

Take my life
Take this pain
Take it all
There's no one left to blame

I go on
But I suffer
I breathe
But I struggle

Please let go of this grip that you bare
Stop pretending like you actually care

End my sadness
Take away this madness

Over whelmed
I am to the edge

I take a step forrward
An inch even closer
Yet it isn't enough
To berid of this monster

Now i've pushed myself further
And the further I go

Get this away
Take this from me

I am pushing you away
But who am I really pushing

I can't think
I dont make sense

I can't live on this way
I can't bare another day

Please give me the strength
To move this enormous bolder
To remove this burden
That I am so sick of barrering

End it now
Or just not at all

You leave me faded
Worn out and worthless
This is more then I can take
It's all much more then I anticipated

It's a constaint struggle
A battle I'll never win

There's so much more
You can't see it all

I want to use magic
And hope you disapear
The more that I see you
The more that it's clear

My emotions overwhelm me
I can't controll this
I have an impulse
To want to scream

Battered abusied
Torn and tattered
Tossed and shattered

A broken fool
A faded point in time
A helpless nothing


Take it all away
See the evil that you bare

Lay it on the table
As you would with mine own

Fade my hope
Fade my dreams
Fade these tears


© Copyright 2004 Lisa - All Rights Reserved
sparrow139
Junior Member
since 2004-05-13
Posts 18
UK
1 posted 2004-05-19 06:00 AM


"You leave me faded
Worn out and worthless"

I liked this line... The alliteration makes it really effective. Something about the rhythm is good too.
I feel like I should give you a *hug* after reading that. Hang in there hon. If you need someone to talk to, you can always PM me.

[sparrow]

Stepharoo
Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
2 posted 2004-05-19 10:58 AM


Very good! I like it so very much.
I hope things get better for you!
Keep it up!

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2004-05-19 09:03 PM


Oh wow. I absolutely loved it. It was a beautiful.. looong poem. but it was worth reading. I think i will save this.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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