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Teen Poetry #7

Star Gazing

morcor0120ch
New Member

since 2003-02-25

Posts 7

0 posted 2004-05-18 10:59 PM

Star Gazing

The clouds that loom lazily overhead,
will soon be vanquished by rapture.
Reached while gazing upon your heavenly eyes,
and relishing the starry configuration of your smile.

No other constellation could leave me so baffled,
but your stars always have me guessing.
Right from wrong, they taught me life,
time and time again, they teach me how to live.

And I would paint you a picture with my tears,
but they do not stream.
For as long as you lone me your ears,
my life is but a dream.

So watch with me, the April sun,
as it sets behind the maze of trees,
and leaves us hand in hand,
forever linked, forever close.

Stepharoo
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

1 posted 2004-05-19 12:33 PM

I like this...
Great Job!

sparrow139
Junior Member

since 2004-05-13

Posts 18
UK

2 posted 2004-05-19 06:05 AM

Wow, what can I say? This is a beautiful poem. I LOVE the way you compared the smile to stars... Wonderful imagery. So unpredictable and mysterious, yet so exquisite.
Some of my favourite parts are:

"and relishing the starry configuration of your smile."

"No other constellation could leave me so baffled,
but your stars always have me guessing."

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