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Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97


0 posted 2004-05-13 08:06 AM




I Need You
I need you
You’re my dream
You’re my future
You’re my love
I need you
Round your hand around my body
Give me the warm
Give me the love
Make my heart pump
I need you
I need your love don’t go away
I need your romantic no far away
I need you





If you like this, rate those too plz....say its bad poem, or nice or whatever in a trustable words...just to guide me to the better...



  1. Unexpected Love
  2. Look,Smile, Appointment Then Meeting
  3. An Order Marriage
  4. Waiting Moments
  5. I Know




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sparrow139
Junior Member
since 2004-05-13
Posts 18
UK
1 posted 2004-05-13 10:10 AM


The emotions behind this poem are obviously very strong. I can tell you love someone very much
RSWells
Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533

2 posted 2004-05-13 04:14 PM


I appreciate your asking for assistance. I feel a bit odd commenting in the teen section since I'm an old man but wanted to perhaps guide you to some websites that may be of service.

Yes, the emotion overflows here but should be contained a bit. Poetry, I believe, is more effective if the reader has to work (just a little) for the meaning.

Anyhoooo.....here are some websites;
http://www.onlinepoetryclassroom.org/index.cfm

Don't be intimidated by this one. Shakespeare is a very good place to start a poetic education. His vaunted sonnets are explained in detail in understandable language, line by line;
http://www.shakespeares-sonnets.com/icomm.htm

This was a project instituted by former U.S. Poet Laureate Billy Collins. It is aimed at High Schoolers;
http://www.loc.gov/poetry/180/p180-list.html

Dana Gioia (pronounced joy-ya) uses everyday language in his work. Go mid-page and to the Univ. of So.Cal Santa Barbara site and watch his presentation there.
http://www.danagioia.net/index.html

For that matter Billy Collins is total fun....look him up here;
http://www.poets.org/index.cfm

The last sight has an audio section. It helps to hear them read by their authors.

Good luck.

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