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since 2004-04-11
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0 posted 2004-05-12 03:27 PM


I've known this girl for awhile now
17 years this June infact.
She's a friend
A foe
Well, A little of both.

She knows what's best for me
So she tells me what to do,
I usually listen
But Other times I say f' you

She's always giving me "the stare"
...The worldest biggest critic
It's for my own good tho
Because deep down I know she really cares

She makes me think
She makes me wonder

She says she loves me
She says I'm ugly

She's my heart
...My soul
...My everyhing.

She has to be,
becuase this girl lives inside of me.


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Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97

1 posted 2004-05-12 04:10 PM


cute one, it represents who the lovers have to act


~~~Rommance_Touch~~~
  ~~Not_Ended~~

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2 posted 2004-05-12 04:27 PM


It actually isn't about lovers. It's a poem about myself, the other me.
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
3 posted 2004-05-12 04:42 PM


lolololol.....sis...i love it keeep wrting ...

peace

love and repsect

I will do anything ,not to hurt you, who ever hurts you ,is my enemy until i die...

I DONT AGREE WITH LOVE ever in my life.But dont ask me why..

sparrow139
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since 2004-05-13
Posts 18
UK
4 posted 2004-05-13 09:49 AM


Interesting. I can see a lot of myself in this particular poem.
I like your writing style too, it's very crafted. Simple though.
Yep, definitely like it

[sparrow]

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
5 posted 2004-05-13 05:13 PM


I can relate to this poem. I really like this, a lot!
Keep it up!

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
6 posted 2004-05-13 09:28 PM


I know what you mean. Sort of a twist there at the end. I liked it. I know what you mean.
I have told myself to uh..f' off too! ~lol~

Very amazing write...

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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