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Our fate |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86
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I'm drowning in your eyes again... Sinking under slowly. Searching for something deep inside your soul Lost in lust, I am Demolished by the words I wished you had never spoken 'I only see you as a friend' Still haunts me in my sleep. It could be so perfect, Can't you see? We could be so much more Something so complete Our fate lies in the palm of your heart But you're saying never, And I'm screaming FOREVER. (((Censored))) |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
Sweet, one,,,,but i dont c we have to be scare while we are beside the lover....we feel we are protecting... ~~~Rommance_Touch~~~ ~~Not_Ended~~ |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
It was good! I have felt that way a time or two. Keep up the great work! |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
This perfectly describes how I feel at the moment . . . Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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sparrow139 Junior Member
since 2004-05-13
Posts 18UK |
"Our fate lies in the palm of your heart" I like that line. It's so simple. When I first read it, I thought it said "palm of your hand", but it says heart... So simple, and yet really effective. I thought it was well constructed. I really like this one! |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
This was sweet, but sad too. I could feel your pain in this one.. which is something i love about poetry.. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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