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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-05-11 08:40 PM



Yes, you make me happy.
Yes, I love you more than the world.
But why do I have to tell you that,
For you to know it?
Don’t my eyes show it?
When I look at you,
Can’t you already see it?...

Why can’t you ever talk to me,
When something’s bothering you?
You act like you can’t trust me,
Even though I know you do.
No, instead, you keep it all locked away,
But eventually, you’re gonna run out of space,
To keep all those secrets…

Believe me…I know.
Past experiences left me with nothing.
I had this ball of pain,
Trapped inside me,
That I couldn’t seem to get rid of.
You know why?
Because I wouldn’t open up…to anyone.
I kept everything to myself..
I didn’t trust the world.

Now….
I still don’t trust the world,
But there are a select few,
Who have been allowed
To see what’s going on,
Inside my head.
And I’m thankful I did that,
The weight has been lifted off my shoulders,
So why do you continue to weigh YOURSELF down?

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

© Copyright 2004 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
1 posted 2004-05-11 09:18 PM


omg,omg omg this is the most  cutest poem i ever had read from yea..i feel like i can really relate to that.,...omg but i truly loved it im saving it for sure...keep posting please...ur poems are terffic....
love and respect

peace

I will do anything ,not to hurt you, who ever hurts you ,is my enemy until i die...

I DONT AGREE WITH LOVE ever in my life.But dont ask me why..

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
Posts 252
Far from where I am going
2 posted 2004-05-12 07:34 AM


This poem was quite nice. Keep up the good work
Fleur
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since 2004-04-09
Posts 103

3 posted 2004-05-12 09:07 AM


Very cute poem... so nice... Loved iT!!
Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2004-05-12 10:42 AM


Please, explain to me, how this poem is "cute", because it really wasn't meant to be, and I still don't think it is.

It's been awhile,since I've seen the way, the candles light your face. It's been a while, but I can still remember just the way you taste! ~StainD

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2004-05-12 11:22 AM


Hey this is more upbeat and yes you HAVE lifted that weight, and with your care so shall the one you speak of. Remember you can only help to lead, you can not make them go where they do not want to.  HUGS
Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
6 posted 2004-05-12 10:26 PM


I really like this. I can relate to it in some way!
Great Work,
keep it up!

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