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Four levels in life- BABY-Teen-ADULT-grandparents..
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Four levels in life- BABY-Teen-ADULT-grandparents.. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
Four levels in life. --------------------- When you are a baby. When you are young man\lady. When you are an adult. When you are a grandparents.. I am baby ,someone get me out this mess,,i need to be changed,and i mean now.gET me a bottle ,im hungry,im soo sick and tired ,i need you by me TO GIVE ME SOME LOVe and make me fall asleep in your arms .Mommy... THIS IS MY GOAL IN LIFE. I am a young man/lady, i need someone to love me and give me some attention in life, dont you care ? dont you know what im going through,i need my love here ,and now ,beside me to make me breathe and to make me feel like i am alive, im going through drugzand even sex because i have no family that cares ,i have no one to feel me breathe... BUTi cant wait until i grow up so i would be a real man\women ,no more immature teenager going on that wishes to die....ARE'NT I STUPID TO FOGET I HAVE A LIFE?..this is my goal in life.. I Am adult,raising my kids the rights, teaching them from wrong to right, giving them love, supporting them in everything they do,this is my job until i die, and hopefully they will be something that makes me proud ,even though i carried them nine months and giving them my blood but it seeems so worth it than being so alone in this wonderful life.this is my goal in life. I Am Grandparent,, just riding a wheel chair ..hoping for my grandchildren to learn the rights,to live life, as i taught the other kids to livve in this life and be a man and a women to depend on yourself,Never takemoney that you dont earn ..or never say no to what you feel is right,just to make that person proud..say NO to drugs and say no to sex ,it will kill you for the rest of your life.. THIS IS MY WHOLE EDUCATION IN LIFE.. ----------------------------------------------- P.S I HOPE you like it ,,i was kinda confused because i was not a mother\grandma...soo i dont know how it feels like but i was justwritting about what i see in my parents, and my grandparents...so sorry if u did not understand it much ..lolol.. I will do anything ,not to hurt you, who ever hurts you ,is my enemy until i die... I DONT AGREE WITH LOVE ever in my life.But dont ask me why.. [This message has been edited by sweet_cute_palestinian04 (05-11-2004 04:02 PM).] |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
i hope u like it ..i was soo confused it took me like 1 hour writting this poem ...love and respect I will do anything ,not to hurt you, who ever hurts you ,is my enemy until i die... |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
The title caught my eye. I think you did wonderful. If you ever want to email me my email is lnk1209@yahoo.com Only thing is how will I know you?! Well anyways keep up the great work! ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I enjoyed the poem very much. Interesting title and subject..  ~Alli~ |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey it's kind of cool to see you progress in poetry. this piece was confusing in some parts, but it's really creative. i've never seen anyone tackle the same sort of subject you know? good job in putting yourself in other people's shoes. thanks for posting. bergundy "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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