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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2004-05-10 05:55 PM



This is about my love. I am hurt right now...I haven't gotten to talk to him much latly and it's killing me. I just love him so much and this was put together in a couple minutes, it's not that great but let me know what you think.

A piercing feeling,
straight through my heart.
You don't seem to know,
I don't know where to start.

Not talking to you
is killing me inside.
Knowing you're there
knowing there's so much you could hide.

It scares me so much,
thinking of life with out you,
thinking about my life,
thinking of what I'd do.

It's not even really you,
that's hurting me,
It's the absence of you,
the absence of light for me to see.

The absence of your love,
is not a thought I could bare.
Thinking you might not be there,
doesn't seem fair.

The tears have started,
they keep on, so free,
Ilove you so much and
can't stand the thought of you with anyone but me.

Though it hurts inside,
I'm sure I'll be ok.
Words just arn't enough to express
how much you mean to me today.

-Erin

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
1 posted 2004-05-10 05:57 PM


this is really sweet...im serious ur poems are awesome keep writting please i would love to hear more...

love and respect

I will do anything ,not to hurt you, who ever hurts you ,is my enemy until i die...

I DONT AGREE WITH LOVE ever in my life.But dont ask me why..

tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world
2 posted 2004-05-10 05:59 PM


Thank you so much! You always reply to my poems and I really appriciate it. Again I thank you and you are an awesome poet!

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
3 posted 2004-05-10 07:29 PM


Awww I can relate...This poem really got to me, I thought I almost felt a tear. My boyfriend and I havent gotten to see each other all that much lately and its killing me...I just wrote a poem about the two of us...its called "Last Night"...lol I must say its not as good as yours!...Great Job, I love all your work!!!
*Alli4000*
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4 posted 2004-05-10 07:30 PM


AMAZING!!!!!
Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97

5 posted 2004-05-10 07:59 PM


i hope u wrote this poem while yr not the mistake in his right...beside i hope he deserves yr love...someday he will feel away and will come back to give u the warm u have acustomed to have....may he will feel by cold more than u feel...

hope for u nice love

~~Rommance_Touch~~
~~Not_Ended~~
  ~~G_w_5~~

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
Posts 252
Far from where I am going
6 posted 2004-05-10 11:27 PM


nice. I could feel the pain throughout the poem. keep up the good stuff

nice use of muffin

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