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Censored
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since 2004-04-11
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0 posted 2004-05-09 11:47 PM


Tears fall down,
Mascara cries
Eye liner smudging
Touching the frown.

Don’t hesitate
Look in the mirror
And face everything you hate.

Question who you are.
And Doubt yourself

Because
You’re unseen
Overlooked by others

No one understands you
And no one cares
They don’t want to

Their eyes are lying
As they stare into your soul
Looking for secrets untold

You feel
Smothered
Overwhelmed
And Confused.

So Start over,
And forget to finish.
Waste away because no one would listen.

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sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
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Earth
1 posted 2004-05-09 11:53 PM


wowow wow wow ...great poem sis..i love it keep it upp

A Friend's love says:
" If you ever need anything,
I'll be there."

True Love says:
" You'll never need anything;
I'll be here."


Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97

2 posted 2004-05-10 09:34 AM


Nice work and close to our life

Keep Nice Work

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
3 posted 2004-05-10 11:02 AM


This poem was good, I could really relate to it in a few ways. Nice write. ~Jess

"Hopeless romantics are only hopeless in the eyes of those who don't believe in romance." -Unknown

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
4 posted 2004-05-10 02:28 PM


Great poem. You got your emotions across very well.
Feel free to email me if you ever need to, I'll listen.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
5 posted 2004-05-10 02:52 PM


I liked it a lot. I like all your work.
Keep it up!

Censored
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Posts 86

6 posted 2004-05-10 04:05 PM


Thanks everyone.
*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
7 posted 2004-05-10 07:18 PM


Wow. Very deep poem. I loved it!

~Alli~

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08
Posts 252
Far from where I am going
8 posted 2004-05-10 11:29 PM


i enjoyed it. it was a poem that actually made me think a little bit. keep up the good stuff.

nice use of muffin

HVNsnt82086
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since 2001-06-05
Posts 30
United States
9 posted 2004-05-11 12:59 PM


reading this poem was like reading an except from my own journal.  the way your words created the images of being alone and a feeling of utter meaninglessness was amazing.  i hope to be reading more from you soon, homefully something inspired by something more positive.

Passion. It lies in all of us. Sleeping, waiting, and though unwanted, unbidden, it will stir. Open it's jaws, and howl.  It speaks to us, guides us.

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