a poem that make people quite angry

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Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-05-09 10:03 PM

Females

Women
the most beautiful creatures
set upon this planet
yet in their beauty
they keep themselves
shrouded in mystery
their real feelings
hidden under
false statments
yet subliminily
they expect their feelings
to be seen.
"I'm looking for love."
is usually what is said
when in all actuallity
green printed paper
and a good vehicle
is all that matters.
Queens of double standard
able to say
and do things
to another gender
yet they are offended
when the same is
done unto them.
yet with all this
they cannot be lived without.

yeah sorry about this but it's the way i felt at the time of writing the poem. please let me know what you think.

nice use of muffin

sweet_cute_palestinian04
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

1 posted 2004-05-09 10:08 PM

i actually did not understand it much but i realized there was emotions coming out and trying to say something out but it just difficult....well keep writtin...i love ur poemss

A Friend's love says:
" If you ever need anything,
I'll be there."

True Love says:
" You'll never need anything;
I'll be here."

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2004-05-09 10:36 PM

women can be cruel, so can men though.
Both genders have the ability to be shallow, both have the ability to be wondurful. None the less, I was not angry with your poem, it was well written, and what you were feeling, so there would be no reason for me to get irritated by it.
keep posting.
Lex

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

3 posted 2004-05-10 08:35 AM

well thank you for commenting on the poem. also just as a side note i wrote this poem as a response to all of the man bashing poems that i had been hearing in this creative writing class of mine. but any way thanks alot for your comments

nice use of muffin

Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07

Posts 97

4 posted 2004-05-10 08:39 AM

I hope u get the love u wish with it good mean reflect..

~~Rommance_Touch~~
~~G_W_5~~

tapper798
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since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

5 posted 2004-05-10 12:57 PM

heheh pretty good poem, and honestly, girls can be jerks. We all have our moments. Good poem.

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
*~Erin~*

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2004-05-10 02:25 PM

I agree with Lexy. I like the poem, I understand what your're talking about, but like she said, both genders can be cruel.
And just remember, not ALL women are like that.
Great job,
thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

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