let's cross the avenue and see what happens

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Teen Poetry #7

let's cross the avenue and see what happens

StarryEyed3
Member

since 2005-06-26

Posts 58
bostonia

0 posted 2005-10-03 02:26 AM

and i sit on the subway as the
ivy covered houses roll past,
foggy windows and picket
     fences in tow,
and i am lost again inside my head.
the line between familiar
     and foreign
blurs before your feet.
you look so cute
standing there,
bewildered and intoxicated
     by it all,
as if another earthquake just passed.

as another man's trash
becomes all i am living for,
you smoke away your inhibitions
     yet again.
quick, jump in now
     headfirst
before you get cynical,
before the feeling of
     dying inside
is heavier than

                 gravity.

you wrap me up in
taffeta and
tie me with stain bows,
so tightly that i
can no longer breathe
but it doesn't even matter
as long as i
     look pretty
clutching onto your arm.

as the effects of the
absinthe die before
my eyes,
     the stars lose some
of their mystery and
you lose much more
than just

          glamour.

"and i'll sit and wonder of every love that could have been
if i'd only thought of something charming to say..."   -death cab

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

1 posted 2005-10-09 05:37 PM

i enjoyed reading this piece alot... it might have just been the way i read it in my mind but it read different to me than some of the other poems i read... very refreshing thanks

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light"
-Dylan Thomas

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2005-10-11 01:42 AM

I really love the way you describe things in this. Very awesome.
Great poem, I think the end was my favorite part! It was really just so...cool.
"You lose much more than just
glamor."
I love that, it holds alot of meaning.
Thanks for sharing.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

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