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Not How She Seems At All
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Not How She Seems At All |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
She's looking in the mirror Trying to find a flaw Always wayching how she looks Wating to take that fall Pretending not to care What every one eles thinks But in her heart and head Thinking that she stinks Going off the deep end When you don't comment on how she looks And at the waist you bend When she stamps her foot But you know she's not all looks When she speaks her mind You know she has a knowledge Wich cannot be climed There's a lesson in all this One you don't like to hear But listen to me carefully It'll take away my fear Don't judge a book by its cover At any time of year "don't like this world anymore. tried to run out the door. didnt work and now im on the floor. can you hear me? do you care? please help!!! " |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
I like this... Keep it up! |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
I liked it, deffinetly something to realate too! keep writing  !~*.:Leah:.*~ |
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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
I liked this one. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow...I can also relate to this poem. GREAT JOB!! Also, if you don't mind I'm gonna add it to my library ~Alli~ |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
hmmm...mmm..ummm.. I loved it until..the end. so cliche, it didn't need to even be said, the message was already implied and the rhyme was forced at times. But the poem..I liked. |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
~~~Nice Work~~~ Althoug its Sadness one |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Wow, I can really relate to that. Good job, good write. I'm going to keep this one if you don't mind. "If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!" |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
thanks guys. hope to read som eof your stuff soon. later "don't like this world anymore. tried to run out the door. didnt work and now im on the floor. can you hear me? do you care? please help!!! " |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
it was quite good. the end (i'm not sure who posted this earlier) was quite cliche. but other than that the poem was grand. keep up the good stuff nice use of muffin |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Great poem . . . I'm going to save it to my library. Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
very good |
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Mysilentsaviour25 Junior Member
since 2006-04-10
Posts 12California |
This is good i like i like..... im going to keep it in my library! |
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