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0 posted 2004-05-03 04:08 PM


Everyone says, "He was so strong..."
"...Holding on for so Long."
Now he's starring at the ceiling,
He doesn't even know what's going on.
Oblvious to the fact,
He's about to face death.
His son watches "him"
As he Takes his final breath.
These last few months
it spread.
From his head
to his feet,
This thing just couldn't be beat.
Now his family is examining
their choices.
Questioning the whys and hows
buts, and ifs;
Suffering more and more each day...
Why did he try and stay alive?
The doctors didn't lie.
They told him he was going to die.

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sweet_cute_palestinian04
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Earth
1 posted 2004-05-04 01:14 AM


wow....awesome keep postinggggg lovezzz
Fleur
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since 2004-04-09
Posts 103

2 posted 2004-05-04 08:57 AM


oh.... so sad.. but good write... very good.
Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
3 posted 2004-05-04 10:23 PM


strong and horribly sad.
the bite of realization, the embaressment of being talked about like a problem.
so...sad.  

Stepharoo
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 149
Washington, USA
4 posted 2004-05-04 10:30 PM


Wow this one really got to me. I can relate to it in some way...Keep writing!
Snickers123
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 94
United States-Iowa
5 posted 2004-05-08 12:09 PM


I really liked it, keep writing !
a123
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since 2004-03-27
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6 posted 2004-05-09 05:59 AM


nice poem.
waiting for more...

love
a123

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