Teen Poetry #7 |
emotions |
Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
*My emotions are taking me for a wild rollercoaster ride* I love you I hate you I want you to die. I dont't know how you really feel sitting aside of me wow... I really want you to kiss me. |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
i like this, it flows nicely ...except for the last two lines just kind of... idk, don't really flow as well as the rest. i mean i love the idea, i like the lines, but maybe if you reworded them it would work nicely... it's a good poem though |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
Thanks... yeah, I see your point. It's just something I was feeling the one night when I wrote that poem. I wrote this poem about someone I really like, but kinda hate at the same time. love sucks :p Thanks for you help! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
wow intersting ......i loved it .......excellent.....lovezz |
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