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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
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My own world

0 posted 2004-04-29 10:40 PM



Enough

I'm right here,
waiting for you,
why don't you come?
you just simply loom.

I put my heart on the line,
and yet all you do is play,
play with my emotions
and drop my heart where it lays.

You like me, I like you,
what more do you need?
the less interested I am,
the more emotions you tease.

You think you can play me,
you can just mess around?
I'm not like that, I'm not
like the other girls, I've found.

You hold my hand, made me feel special,
took my heart off the line,
but when someone prettier comes along,
my hearts back to being mine.

Am I not good enough for you
are there too many things wrong with me?
well I'm sorry, I see you, the real you,
not the one you want everyone to see.

Well, I've had enough,
I'm not doing this anymore.
I have feelings, though I'm not perfect
I know I deserve more.

-Erin

This is like a 10 minute thing,sorry. It's about this guy I know and it's all my feelings about him and my anger in words. Let me know what you think!

"If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!"
  *~Erin~*

© Copyright 2004 Erin - All Rights Reserved
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 418
Earth
1 posted 2004-04-29 10:49 PM


well this poem was another a good poem..but sis take my advice if he looks at another than you ,he does not desreve you,,,believe me if he loves u he would not a girl prettier than you no matter how ugly you are[ lolol,,your not ] but i mean dont make him hurt u just gomon with life and make him come to you ,,dont go to him believe me i know lolol..well thanks again and keep writting.....

love and respect

Censored
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 86

2 posted 2004-04-29 10:53 PM


~You like me, I like you,
what more do you need?
the less interested I am,
the more emotions you tease.~

Really enjoyed these lines.

Snickers123
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 94
United States-Iowa
3 posted 2004-05-07 11:23 PM


I really liked it, nice job !
lilibeelee
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since 2001-07-12
Posts 143

4 posted 2004-05-08 01:06 AM


I really enjoyed this one. Good Write.
Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 97

5 posted 2004-05-08 06:02 AM


hello, how r u, i hope yr fine...a love is a wonderfull word we have known it...so if u love him so much....care abt him be beside him...give him the feel and sense...if that didnt go on....if he didnt feel u. so he is a good player....but take care dont kill a love easy...we are nothing without a love...Nice Poem...although is a sadness one...i hope to hear a nice news soon...
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
6 posted 2004-05-08 07:08 PM


dido, with censored. Those lines were my favorite. Awesome write.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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