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blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind

0 posted 2004-04-28 09:17 PM


I just want to collapse in my room,
But mounds of clothes block the door.
I just want to be covered and warm,
But my mangled blankets lie on the floor.
I just want to sit and cry,
But my tissues are too far away.
I just want to lie on my bed,
But my cat lies in the way.
I just want to cross my room
Without stepping on CD’s.
I just want to open my window,
But I don’t want to feel the breeze.

With all I have and all I want and all I’ve ever gotten,
Of course I’m happy, but I pass that by
And the fortune is forgotten.
Even when the sun is shining
After a plentiful rain,
I only look down at the wetness,
And still I must complain.
Yes, I’m lucky, compared to others,
But I’ve learned over the years,
Behind the objects of happiness
There is always room for tears.

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1 posted 2004-04-28 09:35 PM


Yes, I’m lucky, compared to others,
But I’ve learned over the years,
Behind the objects of happiness
There is always room for tears.

I know how you feel. Nice poem.

DancinQueen
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2 posted 2004-04-29 03:19 AM


Wow....I know exactly how you feel.  Especially because my room's a dump, too haha  But you're right, there's always room for tears.  Very nice, kind of has me speechless just because I know.  So thats all I'm going to say, I know

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kissa~rachelle
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3 posted 2004-04-29 04:34 PM


wow this was amazing. The ending was the part that i liked the most! Very awesome ending!!!

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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4 posted 2004-04-29 06:53 PM


This poem describes how I'm feeling EXACTLY!
Awesome job!

~Alli~

Lexy
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5 posted 2004-04-29 07:45 PM


to be human is to hurt, regardless of our seeming circumstance...there is always room for tears. And don't make yourself or anyone else make you feel guilty for that.
I can SO relate to this.

Cinderelly
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6 posted 2004-04-29 07:52 PM


I really liked this one . . .

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind
7 posted 2004-04-29 08:29 PM


thanks so much for the comments you guys  
blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind
8 posted 2004-04-29 08:33 PM


thanks so much for the comments you guys  
blackandwhitehorizon
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an akward state of mind
9 posted 2004-05-06 08:10 PM


yeah oops sorry, somehow posted that twice... anyways, this whole 'down' attitude is usually not mine, I really try to be optimistic and very grateful, and most of the time I am... but just being a teenager, sometimes, I just feel like curling up and crying, and I can't really think of why i'm so sad, but i just know it would feel nice to cry... so this poem just came to me one night when I couldn't seem to do anything but sit and write.

"love is but a song we sing and fear's the way we die"

swatcatpettus
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10 posted 2004-05-15 12:48 PM


love tha way u blended tha good with tha bad
sweet_cute_palestinian04
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11 posted 2004-05-15 01:01 AM


wowow...awesomeeee

I will cover you with my blood,not only because
i love you but because your are the one that turned my blood a color....

yankees01rugby
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12 posted 2004-05-15 10:31 AM


wow...i really like this one! i feel that way alot, but it never seems that i can cry.

"What your mind believes, your body will achieve. Its time to start believing."

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13 posted 2004-05-15 10:33 AM


very well conveyed!
you know the balance...to revel in what you have, and still have room for modest tears every now and then.
enjoyed

Fleur
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14 posted 2004-05-15 12:49 PM


Oh!! I loved the last sentences!!! I know how it feels like. I loved this poem!!! Great job!
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