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my waterfall |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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ok this is a very personal song and i don't know if its any good or not...but when i sing it...it just feels right....so leave your thoughts... my waterfall v. 1 (there's something in your eyes that makes me not regret the tears i have cried for you night after night but somehow you still don't understand that the love i have is so true) hk. (you told me that nothing was ever going to happen at all but baby you don't understand you caused my waterfall) ch. (i'll listen to our song any time i can and swallow the tears i want to hold back i don't want you to see what you've caused don't want you to remember my waterfall) v.2 (you held my hand time after time trace your finger around my eyes even though you knew that had more meaning to me than i could ever explain then you'd turn around and tell me a lie) hk. (you promised me that i was the only one you saw and tonight i won't disappoint you...i'll cry my waterfall) ch. (i'll listen to our song any time i can and swallow the tears i want to hold back i don't want you to see what you've caused don't want you to remember my waterfall) CC Riley 2004 no matter what i'll always love you |
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loner187 Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 106Upstate New York |
Very sweet...and honest. It would of been cool to actually hear you sing it, but reading the words is cool, too. I've written a couple of real personal songs, too. And it can be hard to express emotions really well in verse. Here you did a nice job. Do you play guitar or anything? A nice guitar strumming to the song would go greatly, IMO What if the hokey pokey is what it's all about? |
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