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Teen Poetry #7

amidst falling asleep

apsara
Member

since 2000-11-09

Posts 70

0 posted 2004-04-23 03:59 AM

disconnected.
in this empirical maze;
i fall asleep,
obscured, confounded and disbelieved.

*Belabebeautiful*

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since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

1 posted 2004-04-23 11:30 AM

Nicely done, I sense a bit of termoil here. Very strong write for the length of it, I enjoyed it immensly.
~Live and Laugh~

The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised.
~Bella~

blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

2 posted 2004-04-29 08:58 PM

though i'm probably getting a whole different thought from it than what you were thinking, and though it is so short, still i really liked this

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-05-01 09:42 AM

It was short but you still were able to express your emotions. Nice job!

~Alli~

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