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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2004-04-22 03:05 PM


"...and if you see her, tell her it's over..."

Live in simple sentences
disjointed thoughts unrelated events
unconnected abstract ideas that
do not necessarily leave you unaffected
but more so wondering what it was
that made you so self concious
what makes you want to have
those simple little secrets.

"....I want a girl who will laugh for no one else..."

Wonder yourself away from the tangible
calloused and bruised world and into
the clouds and wish you knew why
you put so much hope into something
so much trust and love into a not sure thing
where you will be left wondering,
at least, for a little while,
if what was meant to be will be.

"...when I'm away she never leaves the house..."

If only it were easier to say
be the love of my life
everything I'll ever hold dear to me
share the world and the stars with
wake up to see your face on my pillow
and never realize if you are unrealistic
if I am being fair or selfish
this relationship is...

"...you know it makes me sad to see her like that..."

(a/n: lyrics=weezer "no one else")

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Don_Juan
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Far from where I am going
1 posted 2004-04-22 11:24 PM


nice. i enjoyed every bit of it. the poem seemed to flow well and i also enjoyed the weezer references

the blue album rocks

nice use of muffin

Allysa
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In an upside-down garden
2 posted 2004-04-23 12:42 PM


Don_Juan - I've got the entire blue album stuck in my head, playing on repeat in order.  It's quite awesome.  Thanks for replying!  Weezer is awesome.
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