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Rememberance?
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Rememberance? |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
What has been, haunts me, I play the same scene on the same old piece of film, until it frayed and begins to blur, our faces tinted rose. The words, just shells now, all sharp corners worn down, all bitterness reduced to sickly sweetness. Was this how it went? What I wanted, haunts me... |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
ooo...inticing to the reader. "tinted rose" I really loved this. I liked the question you asked.. "was this how it went?" helps add to your theme of confusion. Great piece |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
A lovely piece. My only pointer is to see to the line "Until it frayed and begins to blur" because the change in tense is confusing. |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Wow! I really like this one . . . Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
wow... amazing write.. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
Love it! |
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