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spritrider87
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0 posted 2004-04-14 03:10 PM



To be free to fly to swim
To go off on my own
To hang on a limb
To run and to play
I hear what you say
It's time to work
From day to day
No more time to play
Or to be on my own
It's time to conform
To go with the flow
To go against
Would be suicide
No one will care what happens
No one will hear you cry
you will fall with a constant fear
Of hitting the ground
That is so near
The sting of insults hurled your way
Like broken glass on your face
Loseing sight of all you need
Giving up on what you see
The constant struggle to see the light
The constant trouble to win this fight
About to lose
Down in the blues
Fighting against the quicksand pull
Trying to fly on broken wings
Feeling myself getting weaker and weaker
Seeing my future getting bleaker and bleaker
To be free to fly to swim
To go off on my own
To hang on a limb
To run and to play
It's all a dream to me

written october 6, 2003

"i am in troble but no one knows it if you can figure out my messages then help me.
at the end of the rope taking my last breath "

© Copyright 2004 Jian Sterry - All Rights Reserved
young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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1 posted 2004-04-14 05:38 PM


hmmm...it had good rhythm...it was a bit simplistic for my taste though. it was ok though.
kissa~rachelle
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2 posted 2004-04-14 07:30 PM


I like this a lot. I'm saving this if ya dont mind.* ~lol~

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

MGROVES
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3 posted 2004-09-07 07:05 PM


life can suck at times, but it is what you make it, if no one is controlling or trying to.you express yourself well


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4 posted 2004-12-25 06:16 PM


Very nice write!
Merry Christmas!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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