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TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

0 posted 2004-04-14 04:58 AM

I used to think that you were beauty
and that everything magical
could be found inside of you
and these opinions that I have formed
over the past few years,
have been more than a little naive.
Lately, I've been waking up
and realizing who you really are,
someone who deserted me
when the going got tough,
someone who only came around
when he needed an ego trip.
And I would feed you those words
that would make you begin to smile,
and I would watch as you'd pick yourself up,
never once looking back at me.
I loved you more than anything,
it was you who taught me about love,
but did you also know that it was you
who taught me how to cry?
Sobbing till my heart would break,
night after night questioning why,
why you had to hurt me
when all I ever did was love you.
But still I must move forward,
I can't keep living in the past,
and though I'll always remember
I'm also learning to forget.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2004-04-14 10:30 AM

"but did you also know that it was you
who taught me how to cry?"

I like how that was worded and put in just the right spot. The last line made this poem outstanding. Good work! I really enjoyed this poem! ~Jess

Kiss, n. A word invented by the poets as a rhyme for bliss.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

2 posted 2004-04-14 07:33 PM

dido. The ending was like an extra cherry on an ice cream sundae. ~lol~ (i love cherrys)

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

3 posted 2004-04-17 04:02 PM

I can't keep living in the past,
and though I'll always remember
I'm also learning to forget.

I loved those lines!

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

wishing on a star
Junior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 19
sleeping in my warm bed =)

4 posted 2004-04-17 05:15 PM

great job~!!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2004-04-19 12:32 PM

Great poem. I can really relate to this one.
I especially love then end.
Thanks for sharing.

W.W.
We were meant to live for so much more have we lost ourselves?
Maybe redemption has stories to tell maybe forgiveness is right where you fell.

tzaddiqim
Junior Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 15

6 posted 2004-04-19 06:36 AM

Loved this poem, it felt real. Well done!

infinite disaster
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 69
Illinois

7 posted 2004-04-19 04:34 PM

Wow ... that poem really hit home. This described everything that i went through in the past. Keep up the awesome job.

Much love, Akie.

When I find the courage, I will embrace you. When I find the strength, I will erase you.

Censored
Member

since 2004-04-11

Posts 86

8 posted 2004-04-25 11:28 PM

Great Poem

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

9 posted 2004-04-26 12:51 PM

this is amazing...
i know what it is like to feel this way.
you have amazing talent. i love the line
'im also learning to forget'
keep up the writing.
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

10 posted 2004-04-26 07:07 AM

Great poem. I loved all of it!!

~Alli~

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