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Don't Look Behind
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Don't Look Behind |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Don't Look Behind Don't look behind.... There are memories of lost love, There are hearts that lie broken, Things that are left undone, Words that are unspoken. Don't look behind.... There are tears waiting to fall, There’s pain so unbearable to take, There are memories waiting to hurt you, That will cause your heart to break. Don't look behind.... You’re never going to return, Whatever you're looking for... is gone, You’re going to feel so sad and torn, You know you will feel all alone. Don't look behind.... There are friends going away, Eyes so innocent filled with tears, Because of memories that you won't forget, Built up inside you throughout the years. Don't look behind.... The hand you want to hold is slipping away, You’re feet are growing to weak to hold you, You’re going to try to be on your own, There’s nothing much more you can do. Don't look behind.................................... |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I really liked this. I cant beleive no one has relied to this yet. I loved the ending. The last couple stanzas were the best i think. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is a beautiful poem.... and i cant believe you havent had many replies.... i love how you set this out and how you have gott these emotions out.... love your work beautiful. keep it up Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I also can't believe that it has only had 2 other comments. This poem was great! I loved it! Wow, I'm speechles... Anyways, if you ever want to talk, you know where to find me...lol...  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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LegalSecret69 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 69Virginia |
This was very nice. Beautiful. I liked it...it's very passionate! good job. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
 Wow, this hit home so hard. Very powerful piece. The emotion was strong and I like the way it was written.I especially liked the 3rd stanza, and this line...Don't look behind.... The hand you want to hold is slipping away. Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library. WinterWren- |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Thank you everyone for the great comments. This is one of my favorite pieces that i have written. My other being The Apology. I just thought its a situation we all go through might as well express it. |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
i need to keep telling myself that...because there's so much of my past that i still unconciosuly hold on to and sometimes its just hurts so bad.we all do need to look forward ever and backward never! Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved. |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
wow...that's amazing, I loved this one. It's amazing, you put exactly into words what i needed to hear. Very good job. I hope you don't mind if I keep this one. Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
wow chris this one is awesome! it has really helped me through out this week! lots of love! |
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