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A.L
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0 posted 2004-08-26 01:28 AM




...Your Mistake...

I won't forget you,
Your all I see,
I can't forget you,
Your part of me,

I never thought it would hurt,
I never thought I would cry,
I never thought you would leave,
The mistake was saying goodbye,

Your not there anymore,
But your everything I see,
Every thought in my head,
Is you reminding me,

Every kiss that was so wrong,
It's the only thing I feel,
How did we let that go,
When it all just seemed so real,

Nothing makes any sense,
Nothing without you there,
Why did you start to doubt,
Why are you so scared,

What will happen now
There are only memories,
You took away all we had
You took a part of me,

You don't want me to hurt,
You don't want me to cry,
You said that I'd be happy
Before you spoke you knew you lied,

You promised you'd always be with me,
Why do I feel so alone,
You promised me nothings changed,
I wish I would've known,

What if you made a mistake,
What if you were wrong,
You knew I was always there
You knew you had me all along,

Why do I feel so empty,
This day won't seem to end,
Deep down I know your not happy,
Does it hurt you to have to pretend,

Take comfort in your security,
It's the only thing you know,
Hold on to the past and close your eyes,
Lie to yourself and never let go...

((on the beach I remind myself
That holding hands is so powerless
Tonight I dont even have the stars
to hold on to...))
::A Static Lullaby::

I see me frowning in your eyes...
I see the fear in you...
Where no one ever should be...

::From Autumn To Ashes::

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1 posted 2004-08-26 09:06 AM


"What if you made a mistake,
What if you were wrong,
You knew I was always there
You knew you had me all along,"

good grief this just drips with ache...
sad heartfelt write....

kissa~rachelle
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2 posted 2004-08-26 06:12 PM


wow...i really loved this, i can relate so much right now, which i know a lot of poeple can, but i really really really can...lol

Amazing write, i loved the ending... It was awesome...

Karissa

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3 posted 2004-08-26 06:14 PM


Sorry, i forgot to save it...lol

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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4 posted 2004-08-26 10:52 PM


"I can't forget you,
Your part of me..."

Wow.  I can really relate to this poem, especially this line.  It really got to me.

Great poem...I'm so sorry that you have to be going through this.

~Alli~

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