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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-04-02 04:32 PM

here's a song that has no music yet...

Today's Goodmorning, Tonight's Goodbye

Past memories are a promise,
A promise of a lonely future.
Thoe future dreams of you
Live even while I wake.

2 years gone by slowly in my eyes,
Even slower because of my tears.
Goodnight and goodbye for life
Just one more encore to this lie.

Fill my mind with tears
I'll cry aloud tonight.
Sew my heart with painful stiches
And I'll scream out your name!

I'll slow my thoughts and heart,
I'm to your cutting words.
This ends our book of fables,
We've ruined the story again.

Broken heart-shaped candy
Blows away in my hands.
Scattered pictures around my feet
Collage your face.

Fill my mind with tears
I'll cry aloud tonight.
Sew my heart with painful stiches
And I'll scream out your name!

Goodnight...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2004-04-03 07:31 PM

again I say you have an amazing talent to bring life to words....this aches with all emotion...I hope you set it to music fast!

GE~

~~**~~
Walking with bare feet
among a tapestry of words,
each woven thread, awakening the soul
~~**~~

UnsilencedWords666
Member

since 2003-11-19

Posts 63
Broken Memories & Falling Tears

2 posted 2004-04-06 08:16 PM

Amazing again...I think I am going to have to post this on my xanga site [only if you will allow me to...so please tell me i can]...b/c this is too amazing to keep locked away...My congrads to you again...

*~*nessa bear*~*

You can’t choose who you are Only what you will be Why can't you choose To let me be me...*~*Nessa Bear*~*

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2004-04-06 09:42 PM

of course you can post any of my stuff

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

4 posted 2004-04-07 04:43 AM

This is defiantly good you do have a talent...Honestly the only thing that I fell is off about the poem/lyric is that it has a refined feeling to the emotion, don't get me wrong, but it feels a little rounded off, that was the only thing that seemed off...other than that is was grate. I play drums and I found my self trying to come up with some kind of rhythm to it I really like this post thanks for the read and I’m going to put this into my library if don't mind...keep writing

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

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