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loner187 Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 106Upstate New York |
[Hi ya'll, I just need to give you a little background info. on this piece first. It's about a guy, an incredible guy named Matt. Who I am practically falling in love with, yet I'm so afraid to talk to him. Ask him out. this is no average crush. If you guys have advice, I'd love to here it. And thanks for reading this. Just tell me excactly what you thought, not what you think I want to hear. Thanks again, and please read it, even though it's long.] There are so many things, I wish I could tell you Things I want to tell you Like how much I like you, Admire you, look up to you Just for always being yourself No matter the odds And, I wish I could tell you How much it would hurt Me to know you were seeing Her Her, another girl, someone other than me For my heart loathes to be with you I loathe to be with you Have you one on one Just you and me, under the stars Holding hands, laughing together all night long Our souls as one Two unlikely people together Everything perfect, nothing wrong Ever. Breaking the odds. And yet, I am here now alone And you are at your home or, wherever else you may be For I know nothing about you, Just the fact that I like you I feel like I've known you for so long, When we're together You make me laugh And I laugh, deep down for eternity I smile and light up every time I see your face Sweet face, sweet eyes, sweet lips, sensitive smile Sexy smile. Boy, do I love that smile. And that laugh. My heart pitter-patters when I think of you I walk on clouds I want to be with you Please let me be with you, If only you would take me So we can be as one As it should be Me with you. You with me. Oh, you There are so many things, I wish I could tell you Things I want to tell you If only I could bring myself to say the words The pen can write, but I can't speak If only... "Love doesn't make the world go 'round. Love is what makes the ride worthwhile." |
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davidmerriman Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123Dallas, TX |
haha that's sweet. i dont have much to say about the poem. to me, it was more of a telling of the situation rather than a poem, so i hesitate to judge its poetic merits. i have one piece of advice for you, and that is something i have recently learned: that love is not something you fall into (that's infatuation), but that love builds over time as you get to know the person. love is a bond. i hope you find the love you are searching for, but don't think about it too much. :-) enjoy your life. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I like it, because i can really relate to it. Right now i like this guy, and his SMILE, oh my gosh his smile!! He smiled at me yesterday, and i melted like chocalate on a hot summer day!!! lol He is so cute, like a big teddy bear!!! I just want him to hold me all the time!! lol He is so just strong, and big, and SWEET!!! Okay, enough about that! lol. I really liked this poem though! Awesome write, though the Imagery could be better! I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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