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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-03-24 06:29 PM


Paint a pretty picture,
Paint a memory.
Lost in a world so difficult,
Lost in misery.
I see myself,
Flying without you,
No longer in your arms...
Is this a dream...Or is it true?
I can’t wait any longer.
I must know now.
I want to feel you again.
Impossible….how?
A simple word,
But it still separates you and I.
So many questions…no answers,
They still leave me asking why…

Yeah..this was a quick write, so it isn't the greatest lol.


"I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne

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davidmerriman
Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123
Dallas, TX
1 posted 2004-03-24 06:41 PM


yeah, i agree with your comments. beef it up and let the words flow! i'd read some Joyce before hand to get out of the "song lyric" mode and into the "flowing, writing mode". at least that's what i do to combat it.
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