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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
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Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-03-11 10:22 PM


This is a song that has finally been done. It's an acoustic song for my band April's Falling. enjoy. some parts will be changed, but this is what we played tonight.


Mona Lisa’s Frown

This is our last night,
This is almost goodbye.
I can’t stand to see you go,
I’m missing you already.

I wish this wouldn’t end
The memories I have of you,
Will be the only thing I have
Let’s make this last forever…

Our Last night
Will be forever ours.
Only with you,
Stay with me tonight.

Tonight lasts only as long
As our tired eyes allow,
So won’t you wait
To close them a moment later.

Your feelings last as long
As your heart allows,
So won’t you put love
Into my veins tonight.

Our Last night
Will be forever ours.
Only with you,
Stay with me tonight.

Just imagine tomorrow
Night never came,
But the day stayed
Hidden in your mind.

Take this rose
And watch it bleed my tears,
Take this heart
And wipe away the pain.

Our Last night
Will be forever ours.
Only with you,
Stay with me tonight.

© Copyright 2004 Alex Lewis - All Rights Reserved
BabieDoll
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since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
1 posted 2004-03-12 04:15 PM


I loved this! As I read, I could hear it like a song and I LOVE when I can do that with a piece of writing! I'd definitely want to hear it played! LOL. Thanks for posting!

~J.Lynn

*¤§¤*You are born helpless...and you die helpless...*¤§¤*

young_blood
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Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
2 posted 2004-03-12 04:34 PM


thanks alot. we have an interesting mix of vocals for this. our lead singer has an emo voice, our other singer has a punk voice, and I have a more traditional voice that can do almost anything. the song went well. thanks again!
kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
3 posted 2004-03-12 06:05 PM


I erally loved this!!! That is what i honestly think!!! I bet this song was amazing!!! I love music, and i listen to a lot of it, and i can almost just invision this song and hear it! Very amazing.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

drummerboy678
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 134

4 posted 2004-03-12 11:27 PM


I like lyrics that aren't the typical song lyrics.  These ones actually have meaning.

If ya'll ever end up recording something or posting a song on the web, please give the site.  I'd love to hear this.

As a lover of music (play the drums in 3 bands) and poetry, I love the combination of both.

Later man

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN
5 posted 2004-03-13 10:44 AM


thank you all alot. i'm gonna see if i can somehow get this song recorded for you guys to here. once again thanks for the comments.
Spine Grinder
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6 posted 2004-03-13 11:01 AM


I agree with everyone else, this was difently cool, and would love to hear it. Nice work.

"Pain is just weakness escaping the body."

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