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aRiEsAnGeL
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0 posted 2004-03-11 06:21 PM


When I look into your eyes
I see my future with you
When I am living in the dark
and feel upset,all I have to do
is look you in the eyes and
it leads me to the light

I am so sad without you
I depend on you for most of everything
I hope that you could depend on me too

You are so special to me
you have helped me through a lot of stuff
and I cant thank you enough
you have been so good to me
better than anyone else would be

There is no one I would rather be with
than you
I hope that you feel that same way that I do
Why even say that?
I know you feel the same

I thank you again for helping me not go insane
I feel that you are all Ive got left in this world
So I will try my hardest not to drive you away

No matter how dark it gets
I know that you will always love and be here for me
In order to find the light
All I have to do is look into your eyes
and it tells me that Ill be alright

Thank you so much
I love you

Dedicated to:
Zack Boring(my
Boyfriend)

© Copyright 2004 Naomi Marie Alligood - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-03-12 01:41 AM


I know how that feels

he's a special guy, yeah

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2 posted 2004-03-13 08:17 PM


Very nice poem - enjoyed. Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                                                             - Hans Christian Anders

Lexy
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3 posted 2004-03-14 11:16 AM


uuhhh...
well. truth, it was very cliche.
I was bored by it, because nothing stood out to me as great or spectacular.
but then again, I don't think you were trying to write a great piece of work.
This was just like a letter of sorts to your boyfriend.

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4 posted 2004-03-14 01:36 PM


I don't think she intended it to be great or spectacular, just an expression of feelings that she has for the boy in her life, who has been in her life a lot longer than she has been writing poetry.

I think it's a very heartfelt loving write (of course, I may be a little biased because I have known the author for almost 16 years now)  

Deep_Inside
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5 posted 2004-03-15 05:28 AM


such a sweet poem i like this poem, it reminds me that love can be found....... thanks for the hope and keep wirting

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

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6 posted 2004-03-16 07:59 PM


beautiful job

.......
JDW III

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