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Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2004-03-10 06:50 PM


How simple it seems,
To be able to let me down,
Again…and again…and again…
It never seems to get old-
To you.

Betray me,
With your broken promises,
My mind loves the torment.
Brainwash me,
Like you do,
My heart begins its descent.

It never ceases to amaze me,
Of how many times a person can lie,
Again…and again…and again…
It never seems to get old-
To you.

Well now the tables have turned,
And I’m living WITHOUT YOU.
Just thinking of you,
Brings me down,
And I’m done with that.
I shall not be part,
Of those oh-so-tragic endings,
Of the simple, usual depressing poems.

I’ve broken away,
From the darkest part,
Of my torn past –
You.

This blinking cursor is constant reminder,
Of the conversations we used to have…our silence.

"Pain is just weakness escaping the body."

© Copyright 2004 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2004-03-11 04:10 AM


sad...yeah...depressing, but I like it

do what's best for you...you have to create your own happiness in life

aRiEsAnGeL
Member
since 2004-03-04
Posts 53
Florida
2 posted 2004-03-14 10:34 PM


this is really good...but depressing.Do what is the best for you.....i think you already did.I enjoyed it so much.Love,aRiEsAnGeL
muchos
Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102

3 posted 2004-03-14 10:46 PM


i liked this one because you expressed yourself really well. you got the point across. and its funny because everyone in pip can relate to someone, one way or another, and i guess it shows we're not alone. however i understand what your going through and i think people forget the fact that this site is about poems and how we feel and relate. if people keep writing how they feel, then we're bound to make a difference. and this poem made me think that. anyways. i did really enjoy it, and i guess im trying to say thanks, you put a smile on my face.
kissa~rachelle
Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special
4 posted 2004-03-16 11:57 PM


This is a BAD ASS poem. I erally liked it. Yeah, it was depressing, but i liked it all the same.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
5 posted 2004-03-17 08:49 AM


Thanks everyone, I'm glad you all liked this.

"And my heart still pumps twice as fast whenever you walk by. Cause I still love you."~ Blindside

infinite disaster
Member
since 2003-06-01
Posts 69
Illinois
6 posted 2004-03-17 03:17 PM


i really like your poems.

When I find the courage, I will embrace you.  When I find the strength, I will erase you.

River
Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
7 posted 2004-03-19 04:12 PM


"I’ve broken away,
From the darkest part,
Of my torn past –
You."

wow, powerfull words there, almost made me choke in shock, lol. Rock on

    - River

sleep my precious slumber

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