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Olive_8
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since 2003-09-20
Posts 41
Canada

0 posted 2004-03-01 11:31 PM


I don't know what you want from me
I don't know where I stand
And I don't know why you're with me
You won't even hold my hand

You don't show me how you feel
Or tell me that you care
You don't putyour arms around me
And I don't think that it's fair

You make like everythings a joke
And you laugh it all away
You never take me serious
When I've got something to say

You never say sweet things to me
Or call me on the phone
Which really has me wondering
Am I in this all alone

So if I am please tell me now
And give me a head start
Cause I'll need all the time I can
To mend this broken heart

**There is no such thing as a promise!!**

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Missthang
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since 2001-07-03
Posts 103

1 posted 2004-03-02 02:12 AM


I really really like this one. It reads very very nicely. It's almost like I'm floating on a river and the words are just pouring out.  It's a tough situation you are dealing with. Relationships can seem a little messed up at times but I'm sure everything will work out for the better. Nice job.

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
       -Thaddeus Golas

Snickers123
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since 2004-05-07
Posts 94
United States-Iowa
2 posted 2004-09-09 09:04 PM


I loved it, it had a nice flow and everything, nice job!!

~*.:Leah:.*~

AtLsHawTy17
Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 60
IL,
3 posted 2004-09-09 09:10 PM


omg i love it, it is soooo good. i can totally relate wow good job keep it up

Too late to cry, you're gone... why should I cry, you can't wipe the tears dry, so what am I to do? I need to be with you....-Me

*Alli4000*
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4 posted 2004-09-11 07:57 PM


This is how I used to feel with my ex-boyfriend...I can totally relate to what you're saying.


~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

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